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I wright this poem to you because Im all mixed up.

Words come out all wrong, they sound the same but are different.
Its so easy to misunderstand people. The way they type, the way the talk, the way they spell.
Sometimes we just need to stop and listen. Not judge one another just be there, to listen and to care.
This how ever goes both ways.
If one doesnt listen the other isnt heard.
If you listen but arnt heard.
Will it really work?

Do you have a problem expressing yourself? Im sure all of you at some point in your life has.
I just wish in times like this, the other person involved would just listen.

I hope you guys all understand it.

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:iconsolitude12:
I enjoyed this as to the amount of creativity that was put into it. Written in a childish font, using homophones to give out a message.

To me I found it describing how we all have trouble in our lives, that one shouldn't be criticized because of tiny things like spelling or grammar, but to the point one is making.

Artistically, the blue on college ruled paper reminded me of those yellow pads I used to scrawl on, so it had a nice artistic touch to it. I think if there was a bit more space between lines, it would be easier to read. But then again, that could be the point.

Cleverly done. :)
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:icontimmy64:
:giggle: A sweet little ditty with all the common misspellings.

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Thanks hun... More to it then just that though, it also tells a story.
Thank you for the comment hun :hug:

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How sad :( and ironic - and all those things in between.

I am perplexed - I am not sure how to feel after reading it. And rereading it ;) I must say it's bloody clever - the story itself is very sad - but to read between the lines - I am .....at a loss?

For the record - I've NEVER spent more than a few minutes reading deviations - but this one made me take a second and third look. I think that in and of itself makes this work a visual AND a poetic success LOL...For someone who doesn't generally enjoy the written word on dA.

Would love to know what inspired you ;)

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Thank you :)

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Well it started off with a conversation between myself a `timmy64 about I shouldnt have and Somethings are just not clear we got to talking about how confusion people can be, and how they often misunderstand each other so much. like how you have so many words that sound the same. So when you cant spell like myself. Often the wrong word is used. Not to the same degree as in this poem. But you know what I mean.. Just basic things, like "their" and "there" you know, those kinds of words. You see as a child I was always told to sound a word out. and spell it how it sounds. But thats not how so many words are spelt at all. English really isnt a very easy thing to learn at all.
So after talking to :devTimmy64" for a little bit I got to thinking about things going on with me at the moment, and how the smallest of things can be misunderstood. How often people dont try and understand, they just walk away without hearing the other persons side of the story. Leaving that person more confused and upset then they were to start with.
So I wrote about how I feel, what Im going though and well yeah.

Thank you for reading it hun, means a lot to me :hug:

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Thank you :)

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